What worked what didn't?

I am a little behind so I will post two blogs today.

What worked.  The sunject matter of my essay was still tender.  i liked the idea of people responding toward a trauma thatpeople sympathized and empathized with.

what didn't work?

I think I could have been clearer on exactly what the trauma was. but now that I think about it i like the idea of keeping it open for interpretation as far as the loss of a child. 
I have also decided to tie in some other ideas of choice and the idea of something being ripped away in the same moment as the realization of opportunity.